Cutting Words

1. Published: There were no hotels open by the time the storm hit. (11 words)
Tighter: (7 words) no hotels were open when the storm hit.

2. Published: For those patients in whom the cancer has spread from the pancreas, as was true in Doe's case, there is no cure. (22 words)
Tighter: (11 words) Pancreatic cancer can not be cured, as in Doe's case.

3. Published: Students enroll for their convenience and flexibility. Since their computer is their classroom, students don't have to live anywhere near campus. And since the classes are tailored for working adults, they are offered during the evenings and on weekends. (39 words)
Tighter: Students enroll for their convenience and flexibility. The don't have to live near campus since their classes since they are offerred during the nights and weekends.

4. Published: Doe is not married. (4 words)
Tighter: (3 words) Doe isn't married.

5. Published: He now practices with the law firm of Doe, Roe, Woe and Hoe. (13 words)
Tighter: (12 words) He practices with the law firm of Doe, Roe, Woe and Hoe.

6. Published: "The board took advantage of an opportunity to expand the incentive to remediate students in science and social studies," board President John Doe said at a meeting at the Olympia School for the Deaf and Blind. "It's apparent that the Remediation and Recovery program has been very successful with respect to English and math."
Several superintendents of local school divisions had complained to state education officials that some of their schools were being penalized for letting their students retake SOL tests they had failed. (85 words)
Tighter: (59 words)The board took advantage of an opportunity to expand the incentive to remediate students in science and social studies," board President John Doe said. Several superintendants of local school divisions complained that their schools were penalized for letting students retake SOL tests.

7. Published: That conviction was overturned by an appeals court. (8 words)
Tighter: (6 words) Appeals court overturned the conviction.

8. Published: He has been endorsed by many law enforcement officers in the district. (12 words)
Tighter: (5 words) Law enforcement officers endorsed him.

9. Published: Roe also utilizes film sessions to study other teams' punters. (10 words)
Tighter: (8 shorter words) Roe watches films to study opposing punters.

10. Published: In last year's presidential election, voters living in the seven localities that make up the district cast 62 percent of their ballots for Republican George W. Bush. (27 words)
Tighter: (18 words) 62 percent of voters living in the seven localities cast there votes for for George W. bush in last year's presidential election.